kakarotzombie (kakarotzombie) wrote in all_iwant,
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My first chapterized fanfiction.

I've always written one shots. So this is new to me. I would appreciate all the feedback you all are willing to give. Good or bad.


I DO NOT OWN ANY OF THESE PEOPLE. I OWN THE IDEA AND THE IDEA ALONE.

I Should Tell You
Chapter 1:
He watched Benji from the couch downstairs. The older twin had just gotten out of the shower and walked to his room only wearing a towel around his waist. Joel could feel himself getting hot and bothered from the sight of his brother's body glistening from the water. Joel didn't know what exactly to do.
The two had always been close, they were twins for gosh sakes. Identical twins at that. But they looked very different. Benji's hair was long and almost always spiked, while Joel's was short and never really styled. Benji wore make-up, Joel couldn't understand why some guys liked to wear make-up. But there was the one thing they always agreed upon: FOOD!
Benji slammed his bedroom door, snapping Joel out of his fantasies. Joel thought to himself, 'What a pickle I've gotten myself into. What am I going to do?'
Joel picked up his phone as he received a text message from Jade.
I NEED 2 CU L8R!
These kinds of texts were the usual with Jade. He was Joel's boyfriend and always so over dramatic. So Joel decided to reply with :
B HERE @ 7
Benji came down the stairs half dressed, and half awake still.
"Hey Joelie" Benji called his brother using a nickname he's always used for Joel.
"Whaa....?" Joel replied, still channel surfing.
"Is there any way I can get the house to myself tonight? I've already taken care of Billy and Paul. Alex is coming over tonight and it's our 8 month anniversary. Please please please?!" Benji pleaded.
"How come I never get the house to myself?"
"Get a girlfriend then we'll talk." Benji joked. Nobody knew that Joel was gay. He decided to keep it a secret for now. Joel was afraid of what Benji would think of him.
"Fine, I'll have to check with Jade first. We were going to have a .... a..." Joel stammered for a moment, "we were gonna have a Guitar Hero tournament. He thinks he can kick my ass." Joel let out a sigh of relief.
"Well check with him asap. Alex and I owe you one bro!" Benji said as he walked back up the stairs with three corn dogs in his hands.
Joel cringed at even the sound of her name. He despised her so much that he has actually planned how he'd like to kill her. Joel felt that she didn't deserve Benji, but every time Joel brought it up Benji wanted to know who did deserve him. Joel never had an answer. So Benji always walked away.
Joel picked up his phone and texted:
ur house @7?
It took an hour for the blonde to reply with:
why?
Joel only had to say one word and Jade would understand it all:
Alex.

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End of chapter one. Please please please give me all the feedback you have. I would like to know what I should fix... or what not. I like comments of love too. I promise this story gets better and better.






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